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Re: my really crap poem!
« Reply #15 on: September 04, 2006, 05:09:49 PM »
recent events.. kinda helped me make these..

thought.
thought you were there for me,
thought wrongly.
thought friends were meant to be,
thought wrongly.

simply losing such things dearly,
thought i should of known.
people who meant alot.
think i shall give up.

think your not worth it anymore?
lost your faith like this before?
whos you enemy?
whos your allies?
all hidden, all fakes.

think i shall give up now.

Failing.
when your friendships failing;
and you have no where to turn,
when there eyes are glazing:
and its all a blur.

There shall be someone, unknown to some,
who will smarten you up, and make it numb.

so dont despair and dont give in
itll be over soon, just dont give in

I shall rescue you, i shall save you
from these people, from this sin,

of course they will, of course they can,
they sile at you, but bitch behind you
of course they can, of course they will.
They all judge, they all curse.

I dread the day, i hear it all.
all the scum, all to fall.

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Re: my really crap poem!
« Reply #16 on: September 05, 2006, 02:25:25 PM »
I really really like this cookie.
It's very emotional and kinda reminds me of a few things..
*hugs*

I like the un-set structure as it kinda makes me feel like the poem is based around confusion; which I believe it is.

Great work! : D

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Re: my really crap poem!
« Reply #17 on: September 05, 2006, 04:12:20 PM »
thank you