Topic: The candle

[Jamesworth]

Here is my attempt at writing a poem.... it's not very good but i thought i should write it:


The Candle

A candle in a room.
It tries to bring light to the world,
But no one lets it out.
Though they use it,
They take it for granted.
They abuse it,
They try to blow it out,
But it still glows strong.
One day it will flicker,
And disappear.
Then they will discard it,
And forget it.

[Miss Lucia]

Not good? you say thats not good. It is wonderful. Every poet usually puts an emotion in their work to give it passion. Anger, Courage, Depression. You've mixed all three in strongly and its wonderful. I can see the symbolism behind your words and its a lie to say its not very good. It's like me saying i'm Daria. so be happy with your work ^_^

[Jamesworth]

I suppose i am happy with it..... i'm just not happy with what it means to me...

[Maki-chan]

Erm, the theme is steeped with cold reality, so it's not very uplifting. However I agree with Kuri-chan, the symbolism is wonderful and easy to relate to. Every person out there with an over-inflated ego needs to read your words.

[Froggie chan]

Hey this is great James! and dont you worry about depressing stuff.. its a great vent for emotion writing is ^_^
Its very similar to an older poem of mine that needs some serious editing.. I might post it up sometime, but so you know I know what the meaning behind this is and I can relate.
*hugs*
if you write some more make sure you post it up ok? ^_^

[Jamesworth]

Ok amy *huggles* but i'm no good at writing peoms.... at least not as good as you. I've tried loads of times but they all seem to turn out crappy. >_<