Topic: the amateur poet takes to the stage...

[minimoon]

Perpetual infactuation

Regardless you carry on,
Projected emotions,
Thrown upon the one concerned.

Countenance change,
Pain and fury placed there,
Sorrowful emotions suffocate the soul.

Go to the deuce,
I dare ejaculate,
Resolved in my state.

Perpetual is my anger.
Perpetual is my sagacity.
Perpetual is my infactuation.

Translation....

Forever love

Anyway you carry on.
Showing off your emotions,
Throwing them on my love.

Facial expressions change,
Pain and fury are on my face,
Sad emotions are killing my soul.

Go to hell,
I should shout out.
Firm in my decision.

Forever is my anger.
Forever is my courage.
Forever is my love.

[Maki-chan]

You've been quite prolific with your peoms in the last few days H-chan. There is so much emotion, so much darkness in all of it. But in the middle of all of the darkness swirling around her is a beautiful person. Someone that is very sensitive and has been hurt very badly. All around her are things that can hurt her again and she tries to back away from them. She longs for the days of childhood when things were uncomplicated by physical and emotional relationships. These things promise great happiness, but when denied cause equally great sadness. However, once we grow up we can never go back to the days of childhood. Indeed love is forever, but anger doesn't have to be. Experience, thought, wisdom and courage are the cures for anger.

[minimoon]

whoa... mj...i never knew you could be so deep... o.o
Um.. thanks?
And Im very sorry to say that my anger stays... im the kind of person who holds grudges... really badly. I can't help it... Im a very stuburn person.! ^^;;;

[minimoon]

Heres a song I recently wrote...

Envy

My heart beat pounding in my head,
You're there lying in my bed.
My dreams haunted by your smile,
My heart shards lying in a pile.

The times I'd see you passing by,
The sight of you always makes me cry.
Oh how I long to hold you tight,
To feel your pleasure day and night.

Envy and pain tears me apart,
Stunned at your misanthorpe art.
Why won't you let me near?
Oh how I long for you to hear...

The feelings caught up in my soul,
Will you fill my heart's hole?
Don't be alone anymore,
Let me walk through your door.

[Froggie chan]

Without pain and hurt we cannot experience happiness... we would not know what we feel without contrasting feelings and the conflict they cause... sorry something someone said a week or so again... bleh..

anyways I love the stalker poem H. Its different and i also like the old english style.. it sets your poems apart from alot of peoples! originality ^_^

[Maki-chan]

Again very well written, and I'm very sorry for taking so long to respond. v_v

I see a bitter thirst for freedom. Love and desire can tie us to another person and once a bond is established, a heart loses its freedom. If the love is not returned, the bond becomes like a prison not allowing us to seek love elsewhere. Instead the heart continues to desire the same person, until we find the key to that door. Only then can we walk through it and be free.

[minimoon]

Black Rabbit

Falling down the rabbit hole,
Charmed by your charms.
Who'd suspect an innocent rabbit,
They snuggle in your arms.

How vague I was to trust a rabbit,
Now look where I am!
Stuck down a rabbit hole,
Like a wolf corners a lamb.

"Wait for me!" I cry out loud,
Chasing you once again.
You snigger and run,
Oh how you love my pain.

Leading me from land to land,
Cold and hot, jungle and desert.
But I love to follow you,
No matter how much I hurt.

But when I catch you,
Your by her side.
The queen I now know is yours,
And my heart begins to slide.

"I love you" is all I think,
Youa dn your queen look happy.
I sink into eternal darkness,
Why can't I be happy.... Black rabbit?

Halloween on Christmas

I wish I could have halloween on christmas,
Like the story goes.
A romance like Jack and Sally's,
I'd like one of those.

Singing with the bogey man,
Chasing sandy claws.
I wish I could have halloween on christmas,
Let me break through those doors.

[Froggie chan]

Both are a different turn for you hayley, both are enterwined with a film and a story. Both themes explore feeling left out and alone.
In the second I see more of a longing of childhood, a recurring theme in your poems.
great work though! ^.^

[minimoon]

Petrified hearts

Won't someone rescue these broken hearts,
From the fragmented, tortured arts?
Hiding in the cavern of the soul.
This is how it takes its toll.

They shy away from their true feelings.
Not understanding their hearts true meanings.
Hiding in the caverns of the soul.
They dont know how to take control.

They do not want to lvoe again,
Knowing they'll get hurt, but not knowing when.
Hiding in the caverns of the soul,
Can't trust anyone to fill the hole.

Won't someone rescue these broken hearts,
From teh fragmented, tortured arts?
No longer wanting to hide in the shadows,
They need someone to chase away their crows.

Revive these petrified hearts

Tears

I still can't dry these tears,
Even after all these years.

The pain inside wont go away,
I still remember that fateful day.

Oh, how those tears fell,
Right down to the depths of hell.

My heart burned and turned to ice,
I can no longer feel so nice.

So as I weep for all you've done,
I'll think about how you've wept none.

[minimoon]

Hidden desires

Unwanted feelings fill my broken heart,
My head a mess of questions with no answers.
How can I know that this is real?
Not just made up to please my shattered soul?

I must hide them,
From the world.
From my friends.
From the one my desires reflect.

Hidden desires filling my mind.
Haunting my every waking moment.
Stalking my every dream.

How can I be so sure?
So scared of being hurt,
Or hurting my desired.

Crowds of broken hearted

This can not be.
How can I even think it?
Complicating an already dangerous situation.
My heart is the betrayer.
Treason in the highest.
Forgetting my place,
Among the crowds of broken hearted.

How could I dare cross the line?
Thinking of what I can not have.
Shattering my own selfish hopes.
I fall back into line.
Crushed again by harsh reality.
Back to darkness.
Among the crowds of broken hearted

[minimoon]

Tears of a thousand angels

Tears of a thousand angels,
Wash up on the shores of my soul.
Weeping into the shells,
That are my shattered heart, once hole.

Fly back to me on your wings of light,
Protect me from what I fear.
Make my troubles take flight,
I am safe when you are near.

Never leave my side,
Oh, protector of the forgotten ones.
On your wings, I will glide,
I will smile, when you sing your songs.

Tears of a thousand angels,
Wash up on the shores of my soul.
Filling the hearts wells,
Dry their tears, make me hole.

Illusions of the heart

You promise me,
things you can not control.
Stuck between my world and yours,
You said you'd make me hole.

You said you understood me,
Only one who cared.
I spilled my heart out for you,
Thought my feelings were shared.

Once released you changed your mind,
I was no use anymore.
Discarded like a dying rose,
You stole my heart, you stole my core.

Parasite Paradise

I feel your hands around my neck,
The grip grows tighter everyday.
You stole my heart,
The man I love.
You stole my sanity,
My best friends.
You will keep going until you have what you want.
The end,
My life is dead.

Realisation

Happy thoughts fill my head,
the first in a long time.
But of course they don't stick around,
Soon their gone, their dead.

I thought I'd have a good time,
With friends I've known for years.
But their you are again.
So much for fun, Im fine.

Leave me alone I won't let you win,
It's my life, go find your own.
But no one hears me anymore,
Not when realisation kicks in.

[Maki-chan]

I'm sorry that it's been so long since I've written any comments on any of these H-chan. v_v However, reading all of them at once lets me see a common theme to all of them - disillusionment. Starting with the Black Rabbit is an image of a cute, cuddly, bunny. However, like Alice you're led on a merry chase that ends in sorrow and lonliess after what appeared to be soft, warm comfort at first. The "caverns of the soul" is one of the best expression of the feeling of emptiness that I've ever seen. Caverns are barren, empty caves in the bowels of the Earth, where no sunlight ever shines and no life ever grows.

The Hidden Desires and Crowds of the Broken Hearted are very similar. I see someone, very sad, betrayed, disillusioned, and yearning to be healed. They reach out for their desire to be healed, but instead hold back for they cannot have what they yearn for. And thus they continue on, joining the countless others that have been hurt, only a face in the crowd, all but forgotten.

In the last set of four I see a sort of progression going on. Tears of a Thousand Angels starts out like Hidden Desires with a expression of desire for healing. However in the next poem the healing doesn't come, instead there is only more disappointment and disillusionment. The third one gets to the "rock bottom" stage, where everything is gone, there is nothing left to live for, however that doesn't mean that it's the end. In Realization, there's an answer, a desire to get away and leave despair behind. A ray of hope shines through as the person looks towards a new path to follow, leaving old ways behind. Hopefully I haven't gone on about this too much. ^_^;;

[minimoon]

No. I like to read your comments MJ. Your the only one who really understands the meanings behind them. You seem to see exactly what I felt when I wrote these. It's good to know that someone understand. Thank you! ^^

[Maki-chan]

*Huggles* ^_^ I try to be a good listener and hear what other people are saying to me and to the world in general. Feelings have a non-verbal language of their own so a translation from words to feeling has to be made. Part of what helps is that you express your feelings so well with the imagery of your words H-chan. ^_^

[minimoon]

Thank you MJ-chan!!!
*huggles*