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unnamed story (unfinished)
« on: April 14, 2003, 01:40:31 AM »
if you can help with a title, i'll be very thankfull, this is only the beggining, i'll update more later. enjoy.
A girl on a jet-black mare trotted down the dirt road alone.  It was near dark and she still had a long way to travel before she could rest.  She carried little baggage, only a sleep roll and one bag.  She covered herself with a brown cloak.  She kept her face and every other part of her body covered by it.
   A man followed behind her.  When the girl sensed his presence she pulled her mare to a stop and faced him.  He was probably some peasant waiting for the right time to come and take some money from her.  She was not worried, even if he was a robber, she could well protect herself.  Yet somehow he seemed familiar to her.
   “What do you want with me?” she called to him.  At first he made no move, then he walked closer.  She noticed a limp in his right leg.  She didn’t have time for this, she had to get away, fast.  “I ask you again.  I have nothing that you would want.  Why do you follow?”  He looked up at her as he shifted his hands in his cloak and drew out a knife.
   “You will pay for the crime you have committed!” he yelled as he pushed her off her mare.  Then she recognized the man and scrabbled to her feet.  She stood tall and proud.  Her hood had fallen back to reveal her long straight black hair and bright blue eyes.
   “you silly old man.  Do you really think you’re a match for me?  Do you want the same fate as your brother?”  she smirked at the look on his face and drew her own dagger.
   Off down the road came the sound of hooves pounding on the dirt.  Someone was coming.  The man and the girl looked to find the source.  It was a grey stallion.  Never before had the girl seen a stallion so beautiful, and she had seen many.  She put her dagger back in its hiding spot and climbed onto the mare.
   The stallion’s rider was a woman.  She wore a cloak made of a fine silk from the Dwarven Mountains.  It was light grey in color and had intricate silver patterns around the edges.  The hood was pushed back so her face was shown.  She was beautiful.  She had flowing silver-white hair and deep, violet eyes.  She had skin so white and fair it almost glowed and her lips were full and red.  She had a triangular symbol on her forehead.
   She rode her stallion up to the two and stopped a few feet in front of them.  The man shifted legs and got ready to run.
   “What goes here,” the woman asked.  The man turned and dashed down the road.  Both women watched him for a minute then turned back to each other.  They looked in each other’s eyes.
   That horse of hers doesn’t move, thought the girl as she looked over the woman on the grey stallion, that horse is no more normal than its rider, and if this woman is human, make me a slave.
   “I appreciate your help, Pheonix-mistress, but I need not your protection.”  Said the girl.  The woman looked surprised at the girl, and the girl looked up at her forehead.  “That symbol means Pheonixlord, does it not?”
   The woman smiled. “I did not come to protect you, it just happened that way.”
   “Then what is your business here?” asked the girl.
   “You speak so informal to me,” she said, amused.
   The girl reached behind her into the bag and pulled out a golden tiara.  She placed it on her head.  “Princess Kirra.”
   “I am Kayel of Sacron Keep, last born Pheonixlord,” Kirra smiled.  Then Kayel  did something completely unpredicatable.  She bowed to Kirra.
   Kirra bowed in return.  “You flatter me, a Pheonixlord bow to a princess?”
   “The position of princess demands respect as well,” said Kayel.  “You are out late, and with no escorts?”
   Princess Kirra looked away from the girl at this, bringing more questions to Kayel’s mind.
   “And if I’m not mistaken, the castle is the other direction,” Kirra avoided eye contact with her.  “Where do you head, princess?”
   “Away, far away,” she answered.
   “And I assume no one knows where you head.”
   “No, no one,” she dared not look into the Pheonixlord’s eyes, she may be princess, but this was a Pheonixlord.  She knew her place.
   “Come, princess, I will ride with you for a while,” Kayel started down the road again, but Kirra stayed where she was.
   “I don’t need your help or protection, Pheonix-mistress,” she snapped.  And it would be too dangerous for me to ride with you.  Can a Pheonixlord read minds?
   “And I don’t plan to give it to you, but seeing as I go this way and you go this way, I thought we could keep each other’s company, I do not doubt that you can protect yourself,” she said.  
She would be a powerful friend to have. And with that last thought, Kirra pushed her mare to catch up to Kayel.  
   “When you put it that way,” she said and they exchanged smiles.
   The two women rode in silence for a long time.  The sky was dark now, only the stars lit the road.  Kayel held out her hand and the wind swirled, then froze over.  Kirra looked at the frozen wind in awe.
   “Here, take this, it will give you light and keep you warm,” said Kayel.  Kirra reached out to take it but pulled away before she touched it.  “What, princess, it wont bite”
   Kirra reached out again and took the ball into her hand.  She studied it.  It was glowing white and it had imprints of feathers all over it.
   “How…” she started to ask.
   “Magic,” said Kayel, smiling.  Then she made another one exactly like Kirra’s and held it out in front of her.  Then she let go and Kirra almost yelled.  How could she destroy such a beautiful thing just like that?  But as Kayel’s hand pulled away the ball didn’t drop and shatter.  Instead it floated out in front of her.  Kirra quickly held her frozen wind out the same way Kayel had done and let go.  Hers, too, floated.  Kirra stared in awe.
   After a few minutes of silence Kayel looked over at Kirra and found her staring at the symbol on her forehead.
   “What, Princess?” she asked Kirra, amused.
   “N-Nothing, I was just wondering.  Why do they call you Pheonixlords?” she asked.
   “Because we are half pheonix, half human.”
   “You look all human to me,” said Kirra.
   “That is because I change into a pheonix, when I please,” said Kayel, half laughing.  She liked this girl.
   “I would love to see that,” she said, once again touching the floating frozen wind.
   “I look just like a pheonix would, feathers of fire, wings…”
   “You can fly?” she asked, looking at Kayel again.
   “Yes, I can, I have all powers of real pheonix.”
   “I want to see you in pheonix form,” said Kirra.
   “I can’t change now, Princess, I need to be in a large open area, and as you can see we are in the middle of the forest.”
   “Can I see you change when we get to an open area?”
   “No human has ever seen the changing process before,” said Kayel after a minute of thought.
   “I can be the first,” said Kirra.  The two of them stopped the conversation at that.  Kirra didn’t want to make the Pheonixlord wonder at her motives and Kayel didn’t want to admit that Kirra might not be able to see the transformation.  

   “Where is she?!” Demanded the king.
   “I-I don’t know, sire.  She was here and now she’s not,” said a young man.
   “You were told to keep an eye on her,” said the queen.
   “Heaven sake that child, she’s going to get it when I find her!” yelled the king.
   “Now Xavier, dear, she is only a child,” said the queen.
   “Don’t ‘Now Xavier’ me Josephine, I am king and what I say goes!”  He stormed out of the princess’s quarters and down the hall.  Queen Josephine shook her head and followed him out.
   “Oh, I do hope she is alright,” she said.
   “Oh I do too, because I want to be the one to kill her!”
   “Dear, now surely you can’t be serious!”
   “I swear she will never see the sun again!  Why! When I get my hands on her…” King Xavier turned around suddenly and made as if to strangle an invisible person.
   “Dear!” said the queen shocked.
   “Dear!!” said the king, imitating his wife’s voice.  The servant man let a small laugh escape.  The queen gave him an evil look and then continued to follow her husband down the hall and into the throne room.  The king sat down in his throne, still in his night cloths and cap, and rested his head on his hand.  “I can’t take it Josephine, I couldn’t bear to loose another child.  Why does she continually provoke me?”
   “I don’t know, dear,” she said and sat down in her throne next to him.
   “We treat her well.”
   “Yes we do,” she agreed.
   The servant man nodded.
   “We clothe her and give her everything she wants,” said Xavier.
   “Yes, yes,” said Josephine.
   “Then why does she keep breaking our hearts?” Xavier asked.
   “I don’t know, I honestly don’t,” and she sighed.
   The servant man sighed too.  The three of them sat in silence for a moment.  Then the king thought of something.
   “Maybe she doesn’t want the throne?” he said.
   The queen and the servant looked at him.
   “No, no, why would she not want it?” he said at last.
   “We will find her and bring her back. The Captain will start the search tomorrow morning.  Until then all we can do it wait and pray she is still alive,” said Josephine.  The king nodded and so did the servant.  Then the king and queen stood up and went back to bed.

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Re:unnamed story (unfinished)
« Reply #1 on: April 14, 2003, 11:54:35 AM »
A very nice beginning Jenniva. It's been a while since I've read this type of mystical adventure, but it's a genre I do like a lot. The description of Kayal's outfit (Dwarves, silver) brings to mind the Lord of the Rings. Kirra promises to be an interesting character and it's good that your are not developing her to quickly, that will keep me looking forward to the next chapter.^^

I'm sorry that I can't come up with a title for you yet, I would like to read some more first. And often the title is the last part of a written work. It might not come until everything is else finished.

Oh, and pardon my manners, welcome to Henheart's Universe Jenniva!^^ I hope that you enjoy your stay here with us. Just one question .. have we ever met before? You seem familiar for some reason, but I can't place you.

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Re:unnamed story (unfinished)
« Reply #2 on: April 15, 2003, 02:15:22 AM »
The next morning, Kayel was resting under a tree while Kirra groomed her mare.  It was around mid-day and they had just eaten.
   “I admire your choice in horses’,” said Kayel after a few moments.  Kirra turned to look at her and smiled, then went back to her horse.
   “His name is Rambo,” she said.  Then she looked over at Kayel’s horse.  “Rambo is beautiful, but no where near as beautiful as you stallion is.”
   Kayel looked over at her stallion.  He was staring at Rambo with a jealous look in his eyes.  Kayel would have to get up and brush him too, before he got so mad he attached Kirra.  She stood up reluctantly and walked over to him.  She took a brush from the bag near Kirra and started to groom him.
   “Is this what you wanted?” she asked him.  He did what seemed like a nod and Kirra giggled.
   “What is his name?” asked Kirra.
   “Poncho,” responded Kayel.
   “Poncho, I like it,” she said and reached over to pet the stallion.
   Over the hills behind them a troop of soldiers worked their way to where the two women camped.  The horse’s made enough noise that only Kayel’s sharp ears could hear them.  She looked over to where the noise was coming from and sure enough they were pouring over the hill now and dashing closer and closer to them.
   “We have company,” said Kayel and Kirra looked where she was looking.
   “Oh no, they found me,” she said and fell back against Rambo.
   “What do they want from you?” asked Kayel.
   “They want me, we have to run,” she said and climbed onto Rambo.  Kayel stood there for a moment puzzled, then tried to grab Poncho and climb on, but it was too late.  The soldiers had found them and were now slowing their horse’s down.  Kirra got really scared, and decided that she had to leave with out Kayel if she was to get away.
   “I have to go, they can’t get me.  I’m sorry Pheonix-mistress!” and with that she pushed Rambo into a run into the other direction.
   “Stop!” yelled the Captain, but Kirra was already dashing away.  Kayel climbed onto Poncho and tried to run after her but some of the soldiers had grabbed hold of him and she couldn’t move.  Poncho reared up and the men pulled Kayel from his back.
   “What is the meaning of this?” yelled Kayel.
   “You, woman, are charged with the kidnapping of Princess Kirra.  You will come with us to King Xavier’s castle where you will undergo your punishment for this serious crime,” said the Captain.
   “Kidnap? I didn’t kidnap-,” started Kayel, but they had gagged her and pulled her off in the direction of the castle.

   “So, little miss, what shall it be? How do you wish to be punished?” said the Captain as he leaned over Kayel.  She was sitting in a chair with her feet, legs, and arms chained behind her.  Her mouth was gagged so she couldn’t speak.  She looked very tired and angry, yet she didn’t attempt to get away.  She sat there, staring ahead of her.  Then she muffled something and the other guards laughed.
   “Are you trying to say something to us, woman?” said one of the guards and he moved over to her and untied the gag.  She looked up at him with anger in her eyes.
   “Well no, girl, say what you were going to say,” said another.
   “I order you to release me,” she said sharply, and she didn’t even flinch when all of the men in the room suddenly broke out in laughter.
   “You order us?” said one guard.
   “Oh that’s a laugh!” said another.
   “What gives you the right to order us?” asked the Captain.  Then he lifted his hand and smacked her.  Kayel had to bite her lip from breaking out in tears from the sting.  She, being a Pheonixlord, had never been treated this way before.  She didn’t know that it hurt this much.  She looked away from the laughing men as a younger guard ran into the room.
   “H-He is on his way, the king, he comes to see the woman who kidnapped his daughter.  He comes to look her in the eyes before he sentences her,” said the younger guard out of breath.  The men in the room went silent.  Then one spoke.
   “Do you here that, wench? You get to see the king himself before you die.  Feel lucky,” he said.  Then a man walked into the room and every one else scrambled to stand up.  It had to be the king.
   The figure moved over to where Kayel sat and stood above her for a while.  She didn’t look up at him.
   “Is this her?” he asked.
   “Yes it is, highness,” said the Captain.
   “Look up at me, girl.  Look me in the eyes,” he ordered her, and Kayel did as she was told.  She slowly lifted her head up and met his eyes.  The king was a large man, short too.  He had black hair just like Kirra’s, a beard, and blue eyes that could cut through anything, except a Pheonixlord.  He gasped when he saw her.  The guards became silent.
   “Your highness? What is it?” asked the Captain.  The king’s face turned from white with fear to red with anger.  He turned to face the Captain.  He looked as though he was about to explode, this face was brick red and he became tense.  Then Kayel saw his full temper, and he had a bad one.  He yelled and whooped like a maniac and took swings with his fists at the guards.
   “Your highness? What-,” said the Captain and he ducked.
   “You idiots! You morons!” yelled the king as his left fist slammed hard into one of the guard’s head.
   “I-I don’t understand, sire!” screamed the Captain as the king grabbed his ear and pulled him over to Kayel, who was enjoying the sight of all these grown men cowering to such a little man.  The king pointed to her forehead.
   “You see that? Do you know what that means?” he yelled.  The Captain whimpered and crouched as the king twisted his ear.  “She is Pheonix-mistress!”
   Those last words had a great affect on the guards.  They all became oddly tense and had a look of pure terror on their faces.  Kayel couldn’t help but smile at them.
   “Well?”” yelled the king.  “Untie her!”
   All of the gaurds sprung to their feet and cut that the chains the bound her.  When she was free, she stood up and dusted herself off.  Then she looked over at the king who watched her carefully.  She walked to him and bowed while hiding a smile.  She easily towered over him.

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Re:unnamed story (unfinished)
« Reply #3 on: April 15, 2003, 02:30:35 AM »
i don't think we've met before, but its very possible...  if you get any idea of were you could have known me, let me know... now im curious...

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Re:unnamed story (unfinished)
« Reply #4 on: April 15, 2003, 12:46:36 PM »
Ooooh, poor Kayal ... to get manhandled like that by those bakas! I'm starting to like the King Xavier character too. He's very emotional and tempermental isn't he? I'm not sure yet if he is going to be the real villian, but please, don't spoil it!^^

It's your AIM name in your profile Jenniva - maidennelke - I know that I've seen that somewheres before. I tend to visit mostly anime boards, but I've also been to sci-fi, LotR, writing, and poetry boards also. A guess would be the AIC BBS, but I've been to so many boards, it makes my head spin just thinking about it. One thing that is pretty certain .. the Nurse Washu avatar thing - I have used it everywhere for the last six months or so. If we have met before in that time, I'm sure that you would've seen it. Well I suppose it could be that someone else has used maidennelke as a name too and I'm getting confused. I hope that you're not getting confused too, I'm really sorry about that.

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« Reply #5 on: April 15, 2003, 08:38:21 PM »
Kayel was led down through the palace by the captain.  He was a very changed man.  He wasn’t so mean anymore and he apologized to kayel every second he could get.  As they entered the throne room Kayel did a deep bow after a few steps.  The captain did the same.  The queen was equally as large as the king was.  She had curly red hair, cut short and dark green eyes.  Kayel thought that the king and queen made a very good pair.  She bowed again respectively before approaching them.
   “Your majesties.” She said as she looked up at them.
   “We are dreadfully sorry for our guards behavior earlier, and if there is anyway we can make it up to you, just ask it of us,” said the queen.  
   “Your highness, as you can see I have not been hurt so terribly I can’t make it through.  I am fine, and I have forgiven your captain and his men many times.  I bear no ill will to you or your people for what has happened, and I am sure that he has learned a valuable lesson today,” she turned to the captain and smiled.
   “How unfortunate, was it my fault?” said a familiar voice from behind them.  Kayel turned around and saw Kirra, only she didn’t look like the little girl she had seen before, she looked much older now, much more like a princess.  She had her hair pulled back in a very elegant way, and she had on a long red gown that shimmered in the light.  The sleeves of the dress were cut so that little diamonds of Kirra’s skin could be seen.  It was a very beautiful sight.  The king turned bright red.
   “Yes it was your fault, girl!” he boomed.  He stood and made his way to Kirra, closely followed by the queen.  As the king approached, Kirra backed away.  
   “Xavier! Let her be!” yelled the queen, trying to get his attention.
   “I will not, Josephine, this girl does not know the extent to what she has done this time!”
   “No, father, I don’t know what I did wrong!” she dodged her father.
   “My dear, a lot has happened while you were away?” asked the queen, as she blocked her husband.
   “Does she realize what has been happening to us? Its time she grew up!” yelled the king.  He swung his arm at Kirra, and she ducked. He was about to swing again, but a horn sounded.  The king and queen went back to their thrones and sat down.  Kirra made her way over to Kayel just as a man entered the room, followed by a few servants.  Kirra leaned over and whispered in Kayel’s ears.
   “This is Duke Jared, his manners are repulsive, and he’ll try and court just about anything with a chest,” she whispered.  Kayel laughed. The duke had long brown hair, and he was very skinny.  He turned to Kirra and smiled a crooked smile.

   As everyone took his or her seats at the dinning table in the hall, Kayel saw the Duke take a seat at one end, and Kirra sat at the other end.  Kayel took the seat next to Kirra, as the Duke stood and moved over to Kirra’s other side.  Kayel could tell this didn’t make Kirra happy.
   “Hello Kirra dear, it seems ages since I last saw your beautiful face,” said Duke Jared, bowing before he sat.  He took her hand and tried to kiss it but she pulled it away.
   “My dear duke, I am afraid you have not met my lady Kayel,” she said and looked over at Kayel in an apologizing way.
   The duke looked over at Kayel.  He looked her over, from head to toe.
   “Good day, my lady,” he turned back to Kirra.  “My dear, I am dreadfully sorry.”  He stood and held his hand out to her.  “Do you wish to talk about it?”
   Kirra hesitated for a moment, and then took his hand and they left the room.  Kayel watched them go, and then turned her attention back to the others. A few minutes later the Duke came back in and sat down.
   “Where did she go?” Kayel asked him.
   “To her room,” he replied.  He turned to her, and smiled.  He moved his chair closer to her, and she stood up suddenly.
   “Your majesty, may I be excused?” she asked quickly.
   “Uh, yes, of course, what ever you want,” the king said.  Kayel bowed and left the room.

   “Princess?” Kayel whispered while knocking softly on the large wooden door.  There was a short sigh from the other side of the door and a click.  Kayel felt the knob turn slowly and Kayel opened the door just a crack and slid in, closing the door behind her.
   Kirra stood in front of a full-length mirror, looking over herself with strange eyes.  She still had on the red gown, only now her hair was out of the clips and it rest on her shoulders in long black waves.  She then looked at Kayel through the mirror.
   “Princess…” Kayel said, but Kirra hushed her.  She moved to her bed and sat down.  She looked up at Kayel with her blue eyes, but they were somehow different.
   “Are we not friends, Kayel?”  She paused for a second only to brush a strand of hair from her pale face, and she rested the hand on her leg,  “I like to think we are.”
   “I believe so,” Kayel said after a moment.  She felt very strange all of a sudden, like she was in a room with a complete stranger and not Kirra at all.
   “Then you must not call me ‘Princess’ anymore,” she said, smiling,  “For my name is Kirra.”  She stood up and walked over to Kayel.  She walked slowly around her, examining every detail.
   “I came up here to see if you were well, you left so suddenly.”
   “My family is going to Naprosyn, do you know what Naprosyn is?” Kirra asked.
   “It is a country,” Kayel answered looking at Kirra through the corner of her eye.
   “We are going on a large ship, it will take many days and nights.”  She stopped circling Kayel and walked to the closet, keeping her face away from the faint light so Kayel couldn’t see it.  Kayel turned to face her.
   “Why do you play me so?”
   “I want you to come, I want you to keep me company.”
   “Why?” Kayel asked.
   “Because we are friends…”
   “No, why are you going to Naprosyn? It is such a small country so far away from here, why would your father and mother go through such trouble? What is in Naprosyn worth visiting?” Kirra sighed and leaned against the wall.
   “My brother, he was married to princess Syreene and they ruled there,” Kirra stepped into the light.  “She died two days ago.” Kayel sighed.
   “When do we leave?”
   “Tomorrow morning.” Kirra smiled.
   “I’d better go pack,” and with that Kayel turned and left, leaving Kirra in her dark room alone.

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Re:unnamed story (unfinished)
« Reply #6 on: April 15, 2003, 08:50:34 PM »
i dunno why anyone else would have this name, its an old old nickname of mine, i've had it for years...
although jenniva i use alot.  there is a character named jenniva in each of my stories, and i always sign my stuff with jenniva.
are you a part of any yahoo groups? cause im on one of those alot, thats where the whole Jenniva name started.

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Re:unnamed story (unfinished)
« Reply #7 on: April 15, 2003, 10:10:23 PM »
It's good that the lonely princess has a friend now because it looks like Kirra is going on a long, sad trip. That Duke fella, looks like a character that you could really have some fun with.^^

Hmm, I don't belong to any Yahoo groups, but I do have a Yahoo account, that's it though. How very strange. It seems that I must be mistaken about us meeting before Jenniva. At any rate, you're here now, and I hope that your time here at Henheart's Universe will always be pleasant. I'm looking forward to seeing some more of your story.^^

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« Reply #8 on: April 17, 2003, 03:04:58 AM »
Kayel shielded her eyes from the blazing sun as she stepped out of the carriage.  She wore a light blue gown and had a black cloak wrapped around her shoulders.  To her right, Kirra stepped out of another carriage.  She wore a gray, tight fitting dress and had her hair pulled back in a loose bun, with small strands hanging down in her face.  She looked over at Kayel and smiled.  Behind Kirra another carriage pulled up and Duke Jared climbed out.  Kirra turned her head to look at him and he smiled widely at her.  She looked forward, somewhat less happy than before.  She followed her mother and father to the dock, behind her was Jared and other members for the family, and trailing behind was Kayel, who knew that this would not be a pleasant cruise.
   The king stopped in front of a rather large ship.  The golden letters painted on the front read ‘The Fatilas’.  He looked up at the helm and then across the deck, but saw nobody.  
   “Permission to come aboard,” he yelled, and they all went silent and waited for a reply.  Finally it came a minute later.
   “Permission granted.”
   With this the king and queen, followed by Kirra, Kayel and the others started up the gangplank. They all gathered on the deck as a young man came up from below deck.  He had ear length blonde hair and pale green eyes.  Kayel noted that he was very handsome.
   The man walked towards them and stopped in front of the king and queen, bowing deeply.  Then he turned to Kirra and bowed to her also, only not as deep, and for the rest of them he inclined his head respectively.  
   “Welcome to ‘The Fatilas’,” he said.  “The captain will be here in a moment.”  He was looking everyone over while he said this, but his eyes lingered on Kayel a little too long.  Then the captian jumped down in front of them.  Surprisingly it was a woman.  She wore knee high boots, tight gray pants and a dark blue tunic.  She had black shoulder length hair that was pulled back in a braid.  She smiled and bowed to the group.
   “Good day, your majesties, my name is Jenniva, and welcome to my ship,” she pointed to the blonde haired man, “that is my first mate, hatchet.” She smiled and bowed again.  “Now, if you would please come with me, I’d be happy to show each of you to your rooms.”
   “I’ll bring the young ladies to their cabin, Jenn.” With that hatchet held out his arm to Kayel and the other to Kirra.  Kirra took it first.  She hung on tightly and smiled.  He smiled back.  Hatchet took them down below deck to a small room with two beds in it, one small table and two chairs.  Everything was nailed to the floor.  Kirra walked over to a bed and sat down.  Kayel walked over to the other one and placed her bags on it.  Hatchet stood in the doorway watching her.  She turned around and smiled at him, then went back to unpacking.  Kirra walked over to Kayel’s bed and sat down, she bounced once.
   “Hey! Your bed is softer than mine!” she complained.  Kayel sighed and started packing her stuff again.  
   “You can have it,” she said, Kirra smiled.
   “Thank you.” She said happily.  Hatchet moved from the doorway and walked over to Kayel, covering the space between them in two steps.
   “So you must be someone important to be traveling with the royal family, are you a dutchess?” Hatchet asked her.  He caught her eyes and held them.  Kirra watched them carefully, then got up and walked in between them.
   “No, she’s not a dutchess.”  Kayel took the hint and turned around and started unpacking again.  Hatchet, how ever, wasn’t going to give up that easily.
   “Is it possible, then, that you have a sister I was not aware of.”  Kayel smiled to herself and turned to face him.  She pushed the strands of hair out of her face and he saw the mark for the first time.  “Oh, I knew there was something about you.”  Kirra watched them carefully.
   “Hatchet, how about you show me around this fine ship of your’s” she smiled and held out her hand to him.  Kayel turned her back to them.  Hatchet sighed to himself and forced a smile while taking Kirra’s hand in his.
   “It would be my pleasure, m’lady.”  And with that he pulled her towards the door and they left Kayel alone

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Re:unnamed story (unfinished)
« Reply #9 on: April 17, 2003, 03:27:46 PM »
Kayal isn't very happy about this trip is she? However, Kirra seems to be taking nicely to the ship so far. And we get to meet the ship captian, Jenniva. You said that she appears in all of your stories, but is she always a ship captain, or does she play other roles? Hatchet, (unusual name?) seems to be a nice guy, polite, easy going, and good looking too, and I look forward to seeing more of him and Jenniva too.^^

I really miss writing alot, why can't I have more time?? *cries*

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Re:unnamed story (unfinished)
« Reply #10 on: April 17, 2003, 05:00:21 PM »

I really miss writing alot, why can't I have more time?? *cries*

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Re:unnamed story (unfinished)
« Reply #11 on: April 18, 2003, 01:52:30 AM »
*snff* *snff*

Thanks Tyr.^^ *Hugs Washu plushie*

Writing is something that I really used to love, but that was quite a few years ago. That was before I had a pc, so it was handwritten or done on a typewriter so I can't easily post any of it here. The Washu story that I posted here was done in two sittings, less than a day's work. If only there was more time ...


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Re:unnamed story (unfinished)
« Reply #12 on: April 18, 2003, 05:42:03 PM »
yea, i love to write, but i also dont have alot of time.  i dont think your going to be getting much more within the next few days.  my problem is i know what i want to happen, but i don't know how to get them there.  i got bored with where i was and i skipped ahead a bit.  so while i have more of the story, its not in order.  its still on the ship, but its later, and there are events that happen in between.  i would send it but its a spoiler and it'll change the way you look at certain characters, also the action as of now is unprovoked.  she has no reason for doing what she did, so the scenes inbetween are developing the story line a little more.  so, unfortunatly, you have to wait till i get around to typing more.  if you noticed the sentence under my picture you'll note that it isn't going to be easy, lol.

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Re:unnamed story (unfinished)
« Reply #13 on: April 18, 2003, 10:14:10 PM »
That's okay, take your time Jenniva. If it seems like I am rushing you, I'm sorry, I don't mean to. Please don't spoil for me, I will wait for you to tie everything all together.^^

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Re:unnamed story (unfinished)
« Reply #14 on: April 19, 2003, 01:47:06 AM »
no, your not rushing, thats not what i meant, i meant to let you know that that was all i had, so i wouldn't be sending little bits every day, like i've been doing.