Author Topic: Gift..... dodges olives (Read 1367 times)

Miss Lucia · « **Reply #15 on:** November 22, 2004, 08:49:27 PM »

i don't think it either

Haggis-chan · « **Reply #16 on:** December 02, 2004, 11:05:06 AM »

Okies, here's another poem of mine, it sucks, but never mind =P

The look you gave me,
I can't work it out.
It's driving me crazy,
Eyes clouded with doubt.

The look you gave me,
It doesn't seem to scare,
I glance out to see,
a soul with a scrappy tear.

That touch you gave me,
I don't flinch at all.
That scar on my knee,
...is this another fall?

That touch you gave me,
it's burning me now.
Your passion throws me down,
...This is love, not hate?

Maki-chan · « **Reply #17 on:** December 03, 2004, 03:16:18 PM »

It seems good to me Liz-chan, Mee likes it! ^__^ The last line breaking the rhyme pattern makes it stand out. It could be a song lyric too. ^_^

Froggie chan · « **Reply #18 on:** December 03, 2004, 05:17:27 PM »

as you already heard i love this poem

i like the way domestic violence is portrayed in a poem

welldone

*glomps*

Miss Lucia · « **Reply #19 on:** December 05, 2004, 11:27:54 AM »

THIS POEM IS COOL!!

Anselle Burgundy · « **Reply #20 on:** December 20, 2004, 09:24:23 PM »

I like that peom! It is muchly better than anything I write...that be why I no write poems anymore, I be suckkyful at it. I needs to start again though, me has to write for English soon and me not be in practice anymore...

Froggie chan · « **Reply #21 on:** December 21, 2004, 11:25:49 AM »

my english teacher keeps wanting me to show her my poetry... which i dont want to cos most of its depressing and stuff about myself >.<

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