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Re: Trapped
« Reply #60 on: December 06, 2004, 07:59:09 PM »
because she was beaten and left by her abductor

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« Reply #61 on: December 12, 2004, 02:25:56 PM »
All I can see is darkness
All I can hear is my soul crying
For loves everlasting kiss
Blood pours from the side of my head
Dripping endlessly onto the cold
Concrete floor
Dripping, dripping
My souls wails and strange images flash in my head
A baby
A child
Then death.

By me!

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Re: Then death
« Reply #62 on: December 13, 2004, 12:20:04 AM »
My heart ackes more and more every day...
This thorn that is deap in my heart leavs a way for all the blood to flow out through leaving nothing more then pain left....
It is no reall hope left...
The infection have speard and is slowly making my heart turn blacker every day...
Slowly making my heart harder....
It will sone be like a rock ones again....
They say it is better to have loved and lost insted of never have loved at all.....
I say it is a lie....
If you never have loved some one you will never feel the pain when they go away....
A life of lonlyness is better then a life of missery...
Oh god why did you do this to me....?
Why did you let it happend...?
Why did you not stop it...?
thos questions have I askt myself many times but it is to late now....
There will never be a awnser to that....
And if it will I wont lissen...
you say it is faith...?
meant to be...?
I wont tell you what to belive but it was not meant to be that she schold not have died that nigth...
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Re: Then death
« Reply #63 on: December 13, 2004, 05:06:27 PM »
HI Framer!!

and another amazing poem!
to be honest i cant think of any bad points off the top of my head!

welldone!
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Picture
« Reply #64 on: December 13, 2004, 05:10:34 PM »
He holds the picture
In his damp hands
His fingers tremble in shock
He looks up to the sky pleading
But slumps back
his eyes shining with tears
Of regret and loneliness
the same scene replays in his head
An arguement
A fist
A door
Replaying like a broken record
he throws the picture to the floor
and his girl lies smiling back.
« Last Edit: December 20, 2004, 04:09:59 PM by Froggie chan »
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Re: Then death
« Reply #65 on: December 13, 2004, 11:01:30 PM »
if you can call a memory a poem so okay...
« Last Edit: December 13, 2004, 11:03:20 PM by Framer »
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Re: Then death
« Reply #66 on: December 14, 2004, 02:43:24 AM »
Hi Framer! Welcome back to Henheart's! ^__^

Both poems are very well written. Like your pervious one Amy-chan, this one also has the powerful image of a small child suffering in a harsh and cruel environment. And yours is excellent as well Framer. Words from the heart are the truest poetry there is.

On a different note, there is some history between Framer and myself and I understand the origins from which Framer's peom comes from (although I'm not really free to discuss that). But, I have to ask myself, do Amy's poems have a similar source? The imagery you use Amy is so vivid, so real ...
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Re: Then death
« Reply #67 on: December 14, 2004, 06:07:18 PM »
it does? O.o

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« Reply #68 on: January 02, 2005, 10:29:41 PM »
I’d Do Anything…

Sunlight crawls across the floor,
And I cower in the shadows,
My heart lies shining,
Shattered into so many pieces,
That the puzzle of my life can never be completed,
I hear your voice constantly in my aching head,
Your voice that could soothe the angriest ocean,
But it doesn’t soothe my abused soul.

I can’t be free of you,
I must be free of you,
I’d fall to the floor full of life no more,
I’d do anything to forget you,
Anything to be rid of the torment and horror,
But each time I try your face is there
Laughing at my feeble attempts…

I must be free of you,
I am free of you,
I’d fall to the floor full of life no more,
I’d do anything to forget you,
Anything to be rid of the torment and horror,
But each time I try your face is there
Laughing at my feeble attempts…

You walk in,
Your eyes full of fake regret,
But I’m not your puppet anymore,
You see the bottle,
You see the body,
And you see my shattered heart,
But all you do is run.
 
« Last Edit: January 03, 2005, 11:41:50 AM by Froggie chan »
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Re: id do anything
« Reply #69 on: January 03, 2005, 01:48:27 AM »
Wow, another great poem Amy-chan! This one too has wonderful imagery - I can see the pictures in my mind of what's happening as I read the verses. The contradiction of the anguish of love comes through very strongly.
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Re: id do anything
« Reply #70 on: January 03, 2005, 11:43:24 AM »
thankies MJ-chan ^_^

i do like this poem because ive managed to take an old one and made it longer and really change it alot

personally id like the idea of id do anything to be rid of you forever compared with the fact that most people willt hink that id do anything to be with you etc
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Re: id do anything
« Reply #71 on: January 03, 2005, 02:16:27 PM »
wowies amy-chan!
Your getting very good at this! Not that you werent good in the first place that is! ^_^;;
YAY for amy!
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Re: id do anything
« Reply #72 on: January 03, 2005, 02:19:18 PM »
thankies H-chan
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Re: id do anything
« Reply #73 on: January 03, 2005, 08:19:11 PM »
Amy that was brilliant the emotions were so strong and powerful it was a joy to read u have a natural gift at this
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Re: id do anything
« Reply #74 on: January 03, 2005, 08:28:58 PM »
i do O.o
thanks neil-kun
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