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Main Discussion => The Poetry Corner => Topic started by: Miss Lucia on November 17, 2004, 07:38:50 PM

Title: Elegy of Spiritualism. (Kuri-Chan Poems ^_^)
Post by: Miss Lucia on November 17, 2004, 07:38:50 PM: i have a POEM!! it is about the power of water (it does not have rhyme because it is a free verse)

when the world began fire raged as the heat grew.
till water ran and made the world look anew.
water rains over all thru fire, air, earth and all
calm and gentle cool and free that is what water means to me
but it can cross along with ice deadly leathal cold and not nice
now as i end this little poem i hope you care to save the oceans and all the animals!!

look i know it is shit but please just tell me okay thanx for reading
Title: Re: MY poem I writing poetry plz read
Post by: Froggie chan on November 18, 2004, 06:58:57 PM: thats cool neil
*glomps*
Title: Re: MY poem I writing poetry plz read
Post by: Miss Lucia on November 18, 2004, 07:22:21 PM: Thanx you! *starts to dance*
Title: Re: MY poem I writing poetry plz read
Post by: Froggie chan on November 19, 2004, 07:09:40 PM: ^__^ thats okies

*dances as well*
Title: Kuri's Poetry
Post by: Miss Lucia on December 02, 2004, 09:21:53 AM: This is a Hiaku which i have thought off from yesterday

Fur of black and white
I will always remember
For you were mine then...

This Hiaku is deidcated to my cat Tibby who was put down on the 1st of December who i will always miss :'(
Title: Re: My Hiaku called My missing
Post by: Froggie chan on December 03, 2004, 05:14:49 PM: *huggles neil* :'(
im really sorry to hear about Tibby neil- kun v_v

and as i said thats a great way of rememberance
Title: Re: MY poem I writing poetry plz read
Post by: MothDude! on April 08, 2005, 11:36:49 PM: wow "it" has talent only joking neil ur not a it ur a him
Title: Re: MY poem I writing poetry plz read
Post by: Froggie chan on April 09, 2005, 04:23:46 PM: hes not a "him" either.... hes a neil!
^__^
*hugs neil for being neil*
Title: Re: MY poem I writing poetry plz read
Post by: Meilinrose on April 12, 2005, 07:19:09 PM: It be much coolies Neil! I like how you included all the elements in the poem even though the main theme's water ^_^
Title: Re: MY poem I writing poetry plz read
Post by: Froggie chan on April 13, 2005, 05:19:52 PM: Quote from: Kuri on November 17, 2004, 07:38:50 PM
(it does not have rhyme because it is a free verse)

and since when does my poems rhyme?
i really cant rhyme stuff >.<
Title: Re: MY poem I writing poetry plz read
Post by: Meilinrose on April 13, 2005, 07:18:50 PM: Me neither, I always end up rhyming "dandelion" with "cardboard box" or something -_-
Title: Re: MY poem I writing poetry plz read
Post by: minimoon on April 14, 2005, 04:18:26 PM: ITS SHIT! XD
nah, only joking!
love it hun, really I do.
And you know i would tell you if it was! XD
Title: Kuri's Poetry
Post by: Miss Lucia on June 28, 2005, 09:35:37 PM: I am nothing. The Shell of a Whore, the backstabbed, Used abused ready to die, But this knife won't cut me....

(simple and short just my msn name but thought i'd put it here)
Title: Re: No name.
Post by: Maki-chan on June 28, 2005, 10:24:51 PM: Sounds pretty depressing, but angry at the same time.

*Huggles Kuri-chan.*
Title: Re: No name.
Post by: Froggie chan on June 29, 2005, 04:23:59 PM: its so depressing and angry, violent at the same time!
i relaly like it.. though it isnt true..
*huggles*
Title: Re: No name.
Post by: Miss Lucia on June 29, 2005, 04:56:11 PM: Thank you guys. Me just like it because it came from my heart. ^_^
Title: Re: No name.
Post by: Meilinrose on June 29, 2005, 05:04:13 PM: It's not true Neil, but a very emotive piece all the same ^_^
Title: Kuri's Poetry
Post by: Miss Lucia on August 10, 2005, 11:37:49 PM: Your Eyes are mirrors which shatter my skin.
Your Touch is a spark that will burn me alive.
Your Words are like stone which crush my limbs
Your Love is an ocean which drowns from within.

You are my Undoing
You are my True love

Hold me Close, Kiss me gently. And please take the knife from my back.....
Title: Re: My Complete
Post by: Froggie chan on August 20, 2005, 08:36:36 PM: some amazing imagery there neil and in a dark way a humerous ending.

It shows how much love can control a person and how much it can hurt.. well thats what i see when i read it anyways.
Title: Re: My Complete
Post by: Miss Lucia on August 21, 2005, 08:25:08 PM: Thank you that was what i was putting across. A person so needing of love they will stay with someone who causes them so much pain and sorrow. They feel that they can stand it if they are with them but they are the one who causes the pain. The ending is supposed to be sarcastic because in the end we all see the truth...
Title: Re: My Complete
Post by: ..:: Chibi Plum ::.. on August 22, 2005, 02:52:59 PM: aaawww sad. if someone upset me so much i wouldn't stay even if i did love them a lot 0.o hhhmmmm.....nice poem though. i'll stick to my story writing...i'm good at that......
Title: Aroused Desire
Post by: Miss Lucia on October 08, 2005, 09:01:43 AM: Cold Pains shoot from my heart, thinking of
the lonleyness i shall never part, Whore, Retched, Plauge,
cursed, Words so sharp i bleed from my eyes as i try to run
the crimson tears from my hands. My burning love for you
will inspire the passionate lustful taste of your blood on my lips

So what do you guys think?
Title: Re: Aroused Desire
Post by: Froggie chan on October 08, 2005, 08:51:01 PM: I relaly like this neil, again you use a twist at the end of the poem that seems to round it all up.
Though its short the stlye you've wrote in fits well and I understand what you mean.
As for a suggestion, id say try and organise the style a little more, unless your trying to get a atmosphere of confusion across...
But it is really good, great work! *hugs*
Title: Re: Aroused Desire
Post by: Maki-chan on October 08, 2005, 09:57:09 PM: The last verse does tie it up good Kuri-chan. ^_^ Someone that's been hurt and bled by others becomes filled for a desire for revenge, a thirst for love turns to one of hate. It's rather tragic, but unfortunately it does happen and love turning into hate is one of the greatest evils of all.
Title: Re: Aroused Desire
Post by: ..:: Chibi Plum ::.. on October 13, 2005, 12:55:17 PM: WWOOOO coolies poem!!!
Title: Re: Aroused Desire
Post by: minimoon on October 14, 2005, 04:31:12 PM: It's really good but please read the rules!!! 1 thread per member!!!!
Title: Re: Kuri's Poetry
Post by: Miss Lucia on January 19, 2006, 07:02:45 PM: Another Poem my children ^_^

Poor Little Victim

Poor little victim lost in the dark
your eyes full of malice your heart full of pox
Deceiving the masses with your whimpers and tears,
while you scorn at the squirmer brandish her fears.
Poor little victim locked in the dark
thinking your innocent thinking your marked.
We've Opened our eyes and now we will see
your a user, a whore and the pain comes from thee.
Title: Re: Kuri's Poetry
Post by: Froggie chan on January 21, 2006, 09:43:28 AM: wow, I love it.
seriously o.o
Title: Re: Kuri's Poetry
Post by: Miss Lucia on January 21, 2006, 10:42:59 AM: Thankies. I suddenly got the inspiration in Maths,

Tis about Cassie :D ;D
Title: Re: Kuri's Poetry
Post by: Maki-chan on January 21, 2006, 08:51:09 PM: It's really good and very well expresses the concept of exploiting the feelings of others. I believe that this Cassie person has come up before ...?
Title: Re: Kuri's Poetry
Post by: Miss Lucia on January 22, 2006, 10:17:25 AM: Yes she has. Me and H discussed her before and H made the topic...or amy did....It's in the General Discussion Area somewhere.
Title: Re: Kuri's Poetry
Post by: Miss Lucia on March 09, 2006, 10:42:55 PM: A new poem children! While watching Sailor Stars I was inspired to do a poem about Nehelenia. Mainly because in Stars we pity her and she is given a second chance. So hope you all enjoy it ^_^

Nehelenia

Don’t cry. Goddess of the new moon.
Our light will guide your way.
We hide ourselves, from your might.
Your dreams led astray

Do not fear. Princess of the new moon.
Eternal is your dreams.
The darkness swallowed your true self.
Your beauty by its seams.

Your not alone now. Queen of the new moon.
No-one can live without a cold heart.
Our love combined shall erase time.
We banish the darkness you thought would never part.

Please. Mistress of the new moon.
We release you from your mirror’s spell.
Please. Remember your childhood dream
Nehelenia, we release you from this hell.
Title: Re: Elegy of Spiritualism. (Kuri-Chan Poems ^_^)
Post by: ..:: Chibi Plum ::.. on March 10, 2006, 09:14:03 AM: tis coolness! but it makes me think of the mew mew dub >_o for some weird reason...maybe its coz i saw that after watching sailor moon :-\ then i think of the sailor moon dub *gets out gun*

but yeah good poem-ness!
Title: Re: Elegy of Spiritualism. (Kuri-Chan Poems ^_^)
Post by: Froggie chan on March 12, 2006, 09:44:46 PM: Its pretty and it has an air of sadness and magic surrounding it.
Not having watched Sailor Moon myself though.. it makes it hard to understand your reason behind it.
Title: Re: Elegy of Spiritualism. (Kuri-Chan Poems ^_^)
Post by: Miss Lucia on March 13, 2006, 05:49:00 PM: Well basically. the brief thing is from my point of view (Ask Caz for more info on series 4 because have'nt watched it) Nehelenia is put in number 4 as being an extreme evil and such. However at the beginning of Stars she is released from the seal that bound her. and during this period we see that the reason she is like this is because even though she was adored by her followers. she never had a friend, she was completely alone with no-one there for her, and it makes us feel sorry for her. and so blah blah blah and such Sailor moon goes blah blah blah. and chibi-usa eats a baby and does a satanic ritual while no-ones looking. but they send her back to her childhood and give her another chance at her life. and it makes me nearly cry because it really nice ^_^